Motivation Monday | Landing Page Feedback For Each Other
Good morning folks of IH,
I just read a post here on IH how to stay motivated and I commented that a great motivator for me is getting positive feedback here on IH as well.
So to keep each other motivated:
Post your landing page and give 1 tip and 1 point of feedback for someone's landing page.
I'll start with mine:
I'll give a tip and some feedback one the first one who'll comments!
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👋 Avenir is a good choice. I like minimalism. You're in the right direction. There definitely needs to be some visuals added in the hero - keep it subtle but powerful and the image should get the point across without needing words. More powerful images of the product and get to the value as QUICKLY as possible.
I think the spacing is just a little off. I'd bump down the 1.5 line-height on the body just a bit. When you fill out the content in the hero with an image and fill out the header I think you'll see a massive improvement. It looks like a new project so I am sure you're aware.
Lastly, I would break some sections with interesting sections in between. Like testimonials, call to actions, case studies, a video, etc. Again get to the value.
Other than that looks clean. I want to learn more about copywriting so this is definitely an interesting project. Keep it up.
Screw motivation, it's all about consistency, and discipline. However, if this motivates you, cool. I think anyone trying and building something is awesome. As long as you can follow through I believe in you.
My page is https://storycreatorapp.com/ - roast me
Thank you, Michael, for the comprehensive feedback. You are right, testimonials should definitely be part of the page as well. I'll try adding them this week from the people I did a case study for.
I've seen your page before on IH and I really like it. The copywriting is compelling and defines a clear message. I'm interested in how many visitors come to the part of the testimonials since they are quite far down the page. I don't know if you use any heatmap software? If only 50% reaches the testimonials you might wanna consider moving them more to the top.
I think you can play more with the CTA's. Instead of a default 'try for free' or 'join' tell them what they gain when they join. For example, if you want to emphasize on the community feeling 'Become a Storycreator' might do better than just 'join'.
Something I noticed about the pricing page that it says $0 billed annually. This sounds innocent but I think I'd still remove the term 'billed'. It sounds a little bit like you still need to fill in some credit card details. Speaking about credit cards, displaying the text 'No credit card required' really can make a difference in sign-ups. It's just winning the trust of your visitor.
And you are definitely right about discipline. The days I don't have the motivation I start working because I'm disciplined.
👋 @MrAtiebatie , your landing page is really minimal ! great overall impression
Some padding issues in top heading, Discover more button is being but in half on my mac for some reason, it should be above the fold and make it bit bigger
Increase image sizes for higher resolution macbooks, left align your Get access to editor form, add some hover effects on your logos maybe ? just a suggestion, overall the message is loud and clear.
Happy to get a little feedback on our landing page: Dezilo
We will be launching this week after bit of polishing and bug testing 😇
Thank you for your feedback, these are points I can definitely use. I took a look at Dezilo and here are my points.
When I opened the page I thought it was for web designers or designers in general. You can get the attention of your ideal customer more when you mention that it is for interior designers. This way, they know directly it's something for them or not.
Focus more on the problems you are solving. So if sending invoices can be done from a dashboard, what would be the benefit instead of sending it through your regular email client? This has probably something to do with the templating, which sounds like a nice feature. However, the actual problem you are solving is that someone doesn't have to create a document manually. Perhaps the template gets updated every now and then and people forget to use the new template for invoices. This is what you want to speak about more.
Try to avoid intangible words a little bit as well. Words like superpowers, world-class and supercharge sound a lot like you're trying to sell something. And of course, you are selling something but you don't want to sound like that. And run your text through a spellchecker, there are some small typos here and there.
And one last thing. Why is your pricing in Yen?
Wow, thanks for the insights and feedback, will implement them asap !
Regarding the price, we are free to use for upto 10 interior design projects per year, we have two tiers of pricing, starting plan is 7088 Yen Per Year or 5000 INR
We charge Yearly as monthly subscription is a lot harder to do in our country, I have also signed up for your app and it might help us fix copywriting issues 😄
Hey @MrAtiebatie,
Really interesting product. We recently build our landing page and getting the copy right had been really challenging.
For your landing page, I really got hung up on the 1000 computers. I don’t know if you were referring to machine learning or something else. Later on you mention that one of your people will get back and provide guidance, so I got disconnected. I think there is some room for improvement to highlight the human vs machine elements of your product.
Other than that, I also like the minimalism and the scope of the problem. Hope that helped,
Here is our website, let me know what you think about ours.
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I see your point of view with the conflicting 1,000 computers and human aspect. Thanks for that.
I took at your landing page as well. If I would be a manager I'd have some questions about the concept:
Furthermore, the headers in combination with the images provide a nice image of how your concept will look 👍🏼
Hi @MrAtiebatie,
Really like the minimalist design of your website and can definitely relate to the difficulty of copy writing. Only feedback is that I do not fully understand the purpose of the "Discover more" button. It just moves you down a little bit and from there users need to continue scrolling. Maybe use the CTA in your top section to make people sign up with their email.
Here my new announcement page for a small, specialized no-code tool I was thinking about launching: https://sheets2webflow.webflow.io/
Would appreciate any feedback! Thanks!
Hey Titian,
You're the second to mention that about the 'Discover more' button, so I'm probably gonna remove that haha.
About your landing page, I think your headers are quite fine. However, the bullet points in the paragraphs are not very skimmable. If you could make those paragraphs more skimmable by emphasizing some sentences, it could make the difference. I just released an article about skimmable content here.
And check your website on mobile cause it's not responsive here and there😉
Awesome, thanks for the feedback!