Hi Hackers 👋🏻 I am Yugen, the guy who reviewed 200+ landing pages yesterday on IH 🔥 Read More...

Hi Yugen, here are three not-so-good things about the copy:

1. I had no idea what your value proposition is until I reached the page bottom. When I first land on a landing page, I am asking myself "what's in here for me?" You don't answer that question on the top of your page. And I wanted something specific, like business strategy advice by so and so, not some generic line in startup linguo like "step up your life".
2. On the bottom you say "Businesslife.io is an online brand..." and it sounds lame. What do you mean by "I am a brand"? You are just starting out and we don't know you.
3. You also say that you inspire and educate "the 1% of population". There are 100 1 percents. Which one do you educate? Is it the top 1%? If so, and if you are just starting out, it sounds like lying. You can't offer free memberships for the first 100 users and claim that you are already a brand for the top 1% in the same time.

I like the concept. However, it should focus on you. Put your picture on it so people see that it is a person behind it.

Appreciate your thoughts on the other post.

Unfortunately my view of your site is a bit brutal.

I’m on an ipad and the logo is partially off screen on the left margin and some element or pushed off screen beyond the right margin. So doesn’t look very professional (or useable). Guess ipad users will minority of your traffic maybe not urgent to fix.

Looks ok on my phone. Logo and menu taking up too much room.

The text under “sign up for free membership” is not contrasted against the background enough. Hard to read.

The title of the trending post isn’t a link when I’d expect it to be (the other posts below do have titles that are links - why wouldn’t this one be?) Maybe because of desktop type layout it’s more logical. But the portrait on phone it looks like it should be any other blog post.

The 30 quotes post is on the page twice.

Aside from the visual. I’m not sure what you do. “#1 place to learn business & apply to life” is so generic and broad. What type of business? Who? What am I going to learn?

The blog posts are the same bland, generic theme. It reminds me of websites that just pump out tons of broad content to catch some SEO and then slap some Adsense on it. (Which I’m fairly certain doesn’t work anymore).

I’m sure you’re not trying to do that but I don’t see this as a useful, credible resource in it’s current state.

You lead with your CTA to get opt ins. I don’t know what I’m opting in for? Free membership to what? You need to be clear here about what it is and what’s in it for me?

Sorry - that’s maybe more brutal than you asked for. And not intended to be discouraging - You’re clearly trying to do something but for me the messaging is missing or not right.

I’ve signed up as interested to see what you’re trying to do.

EDIT

No thank you page on sign up. A barely noticeable thanks under the opt in. Use a thank you page - is a good opportunity to explain what’s next (confirmation, next newsletter, check your promotions tab) and/or another CTA like a social follow.

I did something similar on one post. Now it's the 4th all-time most popular so it sure payed off. I know how much dedication it takes to do that so congrats, man!

Hey Yugen,

Again thanks for looking at my page yesterday and reviewing it honestly. It is greatly appreciated.

I've looked on your site and I really like it. Some interesting reads on there. The UI is very clean and it didn't feel over crowded.

With the hover overs on the cards at the bottom of the home page, I thought they were clickable, taking me to a blog or they might have expanded the image.

I've signed up, to help out. You never know I might learn something :)

Hi Yugen,
Thanks for your hard work on the landing pages.

About your page, the webvitals tool from google tells me that your site takes a while to load and has some layout shift that might hurt the UX (you can check [1] if you don't understand what it means).

I missed a little bit more context on the 'hero' card (I took a while to understand what your site is about).

I loved how you convince people to signup for free haha.

I miss a bit of proof that your content is solid. I mean, do you teach others because you have experience on what you are talking about?

Good luck out there, I signed up!

[1] https://web.dev/vitals/